I believe in angels…
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No I am not talking about the majestic creatures with wings and halos, I’m talking about my best friends. The people who are with me every step of way; the people who give me hugs when I’m feeling down; the people who have the best advice; and the people who I love to call my angels.
I believe that heaven sent these angels to guide us through everything that life has to offer. These angelic beings are here for a purpose, and they will do whatever it takes to achieve that purpose.
I believe in the power that angels emit. They may seem like innocent beings, but they are more then that. They are our guardians;they are our lovers;they are our best friends.
I believe that angels will lead us out of the darkness and into the light. They will stop us from doing something that we will regret later in life, because they are here to help us make the right decisions.
I believe that angels will wrap there wings around you so that you feel safe,secure, and out of harms way. That’s what best friends do, they wrap there arms around you and tell you that everything will be okay, because if you try to stay positive; if you never give up; if you have faith;and if you have hope, miracles will happen.
I believe that angels will have a positive influence on your memories. When your surrounded by your best friends they will always want to get pictures taken because they want to save the happy, beautiful, funny moments that you have spent with them throughout your life.
I believe that angels will light up your way when your lost and afraid. When you don’t know where to go, your best friends will guide you onto the right path, and you wont be afraid any more.
I believe that angels will hold out there hand for you to take so that you know that they are here for you even when you may not be able to see them. Your best friends are always lending you a hand whenever they feel like you need it even if it may not feel like it.
I believe in angels not just because there beautiful, magnificent creatures, but because I’m surrounded by them everyday..instead,I call them my best friends. There guidance; there power;there helpfulness; there support, everything about them is why I am so lucky to call them my angels.
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Iffrah,
Wow! I know I already told you this but this piece made me cry. I had chills the whole time reading it! It is just beautiful. The idea is beautiful. Everything about it is beautiful.
It was weird when I was choosing which next piece to read and I felt something in my heart saying Iffrah. And I am very glad I chose to follow that feeling. There is not one part that I enjoyed more than the other. “I believe that angels will light up your way when your lost and afraid.” If I had to choose a part that would be it. It really touched me because I remember when I was a little girl I was always afraid of falling asleep because I always just wanted to be with my dad when he was going through his cancer. He would always tell me that if there was ever a point when he was not there anymore that there would be angels around to take care of me. When I felt lost or afraid I could just act as though I was talking to my dad and they would come. The other part that really touched my heart was when they would give you a hug, just like a best friend does.I also cried during this part. I am pathetic I know haha. I am not one to show that I am every suffering or let things get to me. So I will pray sometimes when I feel scared and it will make me feel like I being hugged by a friend, which will bring me to tears sometimes because it makes you feel like you are loved.
The message behind this piece is one of a kind, truly. To make it better and easier to read, I think not using as many “;” would help. It made it very redundant and took away from the beauty of your sentences and all the details you would list and so on because in every sentence there was a always a semi-colon.
Iffrah, you are a beautiful girl. So quiet but so powerful with your words. This piece gave me a connection to you and it made me feel like I know you. It was also nice for me to know that I am not alone and there are other people that feel this way aswell. I would love for this to help us become closer this year and I feel like we can do that through this type of thing.
Absolutely beautiful!
XOXO
Keelee
Dear Keelee,
This is probably one of the longest comments I have ever seen. As I started reading your comment I started tearing up a bit because I didn’t think that this piece would have such a powerful impact/impression on a person.
And I do believe that I used way to many semicolons in this piece, so I will definitely be more cautious of that in my next piece. I have written many blogs for photography but never for English, so this is basically my first blog, and I tried my best to not overuse the semicolons but it just happened and I just thought that it worked, but once I read it again I can totally see how that sort of took away from the rest of the story that I was telling, so thank you so much for that.
I’m so thrilled that you liked my piece, and its really quite incredible that you decided to choose my piece to read, when their were so many amazing pieces that you could have chosen from. I love how you felt so touched by that one line, and the story you had behind it moved me to tears, cause that’s truly beautiful. I really hope we become close with what is left of our high school years. Its quite amazing how you get to know more about a person through there writing, and the connections that you can make with people is so incredible. Once again, thanks for reading and commenting on my piece, and stay tuned for more to come!
XOXO
-Iffrah
Dear Iffrah,
I really like the ideas that you had in this piece and they way you spilt up your ideas into a new paragraph starting with this I believe.
To improve I would add a personal story into your piece. It would give readers something to connect to as they are reading and draw them in a little closer. Also be careful with some of your gumps, for example in the first sentence you wrote, “I believe in angels..” but you should be using an ellipses (…) for the purpose of the two periods.
Overall I really enjoyed reading your piece and I’m excited for more to come.
Sincerely, Martha
Dear Martha,
I really appreciate you choosing my blog to read, out of the many amazing ones out there.
I do believe that by adding a person story into my piece would make it more powerful, and make it easier for people to relate to what I’m trying to say, so I will definitely consider that in my next blog, because writing is definitely a struggle for me,so this will really help me in making my other pieces more powerful, so thank you for that.
Thanks again for taking your time to read my blog, and I’m really glad you enjoyed it, because I tried to make it as best as possible, so people get to know me a little better, and so I can see what people think about my writing style and what I could do to fix it, so it means a lot to me that you read and commented on my work.
-Iffrah
Iffrah,
I truly wish you would see how amazing you are and how much of an impact you have on people. I know you are super quiet and like to keep to yourself, but everytime I am around you or have the chance to experience something of yours, I cherish every minute of it.
I would also love for us to become closer this semester. With having two pretty demanding classes we will be able to get closer there I think. To me the fact that we have leadership together and this class together where both force us to be personal and integrate into new siutations will allow for us to have many opportunities for us to get to know eachother.
It is a blessing in disguise.
This piece to me was a blessing in disguise.
I just want to say thank you for writing such a thing.
XOXO
Keelee
Hey Iffrah,
I just wanted to start off with apologizing I was assigned to comment on your piece, by the way I was very happy to be assigned this piece because I had already read it twice before being assigned the comment, sadly I thought that I had hit the send button during class (Hunnisett informed me that it had not gone through) but now I will correct my mistake.
For you to know, this is one of my favorite pieces I have read in our class. I loved how in my mind you changed from the girl that rarely contributes to class discussions to this amazing writer that brought two of my favorite things together: mythology and friends. I decided to read your blog because of the statement, “I believe in angels…” My first thought was the mythology and how you were going to talk about the massive pure white wings and the radiating halos, but then you did the exact opposite and you said how you were not going to talk about those characteristics; I loved it and that statement made me reread the line three times and completely rethink what this post could be about. It was a marvelous way of grasping someone`s attention and making them want to reread the post multiple time (like I said before I read it twice before the assigning began). And friends are very close to me so that also held a factor in me rereading it again.
If there would be one piece of advice I could give for this piece is that it would be the same issue you saw in class that I have and that’s punctuation. A few too many semi-colon were used; if I am to be honest on my second read of your blog I ignored most of them and just kept on reading. I did read the comments between you and Keelee and she mentioned the same thing I just did and you recognized it and have a plan for the next piece and that is the best thing you can do.
As I have said this post was incredible and I cant wait to read more of your work!
Your`s truly,
Marc
Dear Marc,
Don’t you worry bout that haha, it happens,so don’t you worry bout it.
I had a huge smile on my face when you mentioned that my blog was one of your favourites, and the fact that you were actually pleased to have gotten my blog to reread,prior to the two times you read it on your own time, made me feel that my writing is very special and that people actually enjoyed it what I have to offer. I’m not comfortable most of the time in contributing to class discussions because of saying the wrong thing, or being judged for what I have to say, so being able to write this powerful piece and being able to show people the type of person I actually am through this type of writing is going to really help me to be more comfortable in group discussions because of the positive feedback and the criticism that people give me.
I’m also really into fantasy, and my best friends are my world, without them I wouldn’t be where I am today. The quote I put at the bottom of my piece is what inspired me to write it in the first place, so that’s why I put it at the end of the piece so that people know how I got the idea to write this.
And, you and Keelee are totally right about my overuse of semicolons, and I will definitely remember to be more cautious of that next time.
I can’t get this smile off my face, because just knowing that people are so connected to this piece means that I actually have something to offer, and that I’m not just a quite girl who has nothing to offer, and who is in this class because she has to be here. And I really showed that through this piece.
Your’s truly,
Iffrah
Dear Iffrah,
Thank you for these beautiful words. I believe in angels as well, and this was such a stunning piece to read and ponder, reminding me that powerful love surrounds us always.
Sincerely,
Ms. O
Dear Ms.Orchard,
Thank you so much for reading my blog. I put so much thought and effort into creating this.It was definitely a struggle to write this, and put as much of me into it. So being able to combine fantasy and friends together made for a very beautiful, and powerful piece. It was also nice knowing that some people can really connect to this piece and how much of a lasting affect it can have on them
Sincerely,
Iffy.
Another wonderful piece of writing. Your thought provoking words remind me to strive to be someone’s angel because, as you said, our influence can really impact another’s life. Take care, Mrs. Little
Dear Mrs.Little,
Thank you so much for reading my blog. You probably know that I struggle a lot with writing, so writing this piece was definitely a struggle for me. But, in the end, it turned out to be quite a successful piece that I am quite proud of.
Yours Truly,
Iffy.